Thursday, February 24, 2011

Thee Move On…!

I am weak, I can make out
But leave me alone…
Thee move on... I know my way!

Long ago, a Sunday morn,
When the clock said quarter to two,
Thy cry made me smile.

Days passed, grown you do,
My forties came,
The present late seventies too.

I am sure, I met my vow,
To make your pace comfort.
Now you know… Move on!

You showed the same door,
Which I opened for you,
Thats Ok... ! All set to go..

Don’t worry my dear,
Though my body is weak,
A stick will do, let me try !

Before I go, here a thing or two,
Clear that wooden box you made,
When I sat intense a year ago.

Not a choice, Its your duty,
I think that won’t do for your trip,
You are one feet, two inches tall to me.

Your son will do,
When you touch your sixties
Adieu my son... I know my way !

A year or two for my saturation,
You don’t follow my way,
Atleast thy life be good !

16 comments:

  1. That is what a father can always say to his son. Good. Keep writing.

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  2. __Nice work here, Pranavam!

    __Carnatic music, huh? and one of my favorite haiku writers is Kala Ramesh, she too, a music-maker.
    __I thank you for you visit amd comment... and in my poor phonetic way... su-kri-ah!
    _m

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  3. this is an intriguing write...the choice of older style wording allows it to speak across time...the wooden box line made me think of death and passing as if maybe these were final words...

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  4. Thank you for stopping by my blog Pranavam, your poetry is wonderful!
    Sharyn

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  5. Touching the hearts and moving poem!
    I love it!

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  6. Thank you for visiting my blog.
    I read through several of your poems and find them intriguing. Thank you.

    Life is fleeting. Live it well.

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  7. Thank you for visiting my site, I found your poem interesting, as well as intriguing,

    Elizabeth

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  8. Thank you for visiting my site, I found your poem interesting, as well as intriguing,

    Elizabeth

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  9. So talented, you seem quite busy with blogging and poetry!

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  10. Nice poem. Wish I could follow the tamil blogs.

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  11. Thoughts from the heart.
    Very nice lines.
    Congratulations! Please proceed.

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  12. //Don’t worry my dear,
    Though my body is weak,
    A stick will do, let me try !//

    Love it!! awesome ravi..!

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  13. I appreciate your visit ... and your writing.

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  14. It was quite a moving piece, my friend.. Very heartfelt and intense!!

    Really liked it! A father's thoughts and wish indeed...

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